What economic crisis do you think would be the most difficult for Koreans?

2015-03-16 · 첨삭 강사 Kelly

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Korean experienced big or small economic crisis so far. I think that it was the IMF event that we had the most difficult event. IMF occurred at the end of 1997 because of shortage of foreign-exchange. At that time, I was just elementary student so I was not aware of what was going on and did not understand how significant this event was. Considering on the event now, it was really harsh time to almost Koreans. Most of the company managed to run their company, and some of them became bankrupt. Bankruptcy of many companies caused lots of employees to be fired and many people to commit suicide; as a result, unemployment rate and suicide rate during the IMF were much higher than now. However, fortunately, people tried to gather as many gold as possible in order to raise foreign-exchange. Thanks to the efforts, Korea could come over the IMF on the third year and recover economic condition. Without the everyone's effort, Korea would be suffered from the economic crisis now.

강사 첨삭

Good afternoon Miss [이름]! Thank you for your homework. Please go over my corrections and have a great day. ~Kelly^^ Korean experienced big or small economic crisis so far. >> Koreans experienced big and small economic crisis. I think that it was the IMF event that we had the most difficult event.>> I think that it was the IMF event where we experienced the most difficult time. IMF occurred at the end of 1997 because of shortage of foreign-exchange. >> Correct. At that time, I was just elementary student so I was not aware of what was going on and did not understand how significant this event was. >> At that time, I was just an elementary student so I was not aware of what was going on and did not understand how significant this event was. Considering on the event now, it was really harsh time to almost Koreans. >> Considering the event now, it was really a harsh time to most Koreans. Most of the company managed to run their company, and some of them became bankrupt. >> Most companies managed to run their business, but some of them became bankrupt. Bankruptcy of many companies caused lots of employees to be fired and many people to commit suicide; as a result, unemployment rate and suicide rate during the IMF were much higher than now. >> Bankruptcy caused lots of employees to be fired and many people committed suicide. As a result, unemployment rate and suicide rate during the IMF were much higher than now.However, fortunately, people tried to gather as many gold as possible in order to raise foreign-exchange. >> Fortunately, people tried to gather as many gold as possible in order to raise foreign-exchange. Thanks to the efforts, Korea could come over the IMF on the third year and recover economic condition. >> Thanks to their efforts, Korea overcame the IMF on the third year and recover their economic condition. Without the everyone\'s effort, Korea would be suffered from the economic crisis now. >> Without everyone\'s effort, Korea could still be suffering from economic crisis now.  

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