What efforts did you make to go to exchange students? - interview script

2021-08-12 · 첨삭 강사 Maine

학생이 쓴 원문

First, I studied hard in the major classes, so I can learn easily about that even if the class’s language is different. Second, I study English for TOEIC exam and I have be having a English speaking class for the abroad life. If I’m successful for this applying, I will keep going this class until I leave. Third, I have did exercise in the gym and I have had personal training of weight training, since March, this year. It will make me energy to adapt to new environment. Many Finnish young people are interested in indoor exercise, so I can easily hang out with them for common interest. Finally, I have many experiences like contests, supporters and leader of team and clubs. It will be helpful for exchange student life. *please let me know what contents are needed and omit. *Is the sequence proper?

강사 첨삭

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-T. Maine


First, I studied hard in the major classes, so I can learn easily about that even if the class’s language is different.

>>First, I did my best studying my major subjects, so I can easily learn them even if I have difficulty understanding the language abroad.
 Second, I study English for TOEIC exam and I have be having a English speaking class for the abroad life.

>>Second, I am studying English for my TOEIC exam and I have been taking English classes.
 If I’m successful for this applying, I will keep going this class until I leave. 

>>If I am accepted in the program, I will continue studying until I leave.
 Third, I have did exercise in the gym and I have had personal training of weight training, since March, this year.

>>Third, I have been working out in the gym because I need to keep my body fit and healthy.

It will make me energy to adapt to new environment.

>>It will also help me stronger to defeat possible diseases when I go to a new environment.
 Many Finnish young people are interested in indoor exercise, so I can easily hang out with them for common interest.

>>Many youngsters in Finland are intrested in indoor exercise, so I can easily get along with them.
 Finally, I have many experiences like contests, supporters and leader of team and clubs.

>>Finally, I have many experiences and awards in competitions as well as being a team leader of clubs.

It will be helpful for exchange student life.

>>I think these things qualify me to be an exchange student.





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