What exactly are people looking for when they buy luxury goods?
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In my personal opinion, people want to make others think that they are affluent enough to afford those luxurious expensive items. Those visible goods can express people’s financial ability in a most direct way. Knowing that how rich the person who are they dealing with, people can prevent to be behave inappropriate. It is mean to behave regard of the opponent’s financial power, but there are so much rude people who wouldn’t behave so it they knew the opponent is a rich. I think, due to those sort of people, there must be some people who rely on luxurious goods to protect themselves from the rude. Even though there are other factors for it, nothing is more major factor than showing off and make oneself seem more better than it really is. Of course, there can be some people who just want spend his own abundant money or who really do think those goods are high-quality so it is affordable. But I can sure that buying luxury goods which is not appropriate for one’s income is a bad purchase.
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Hi, Sue. You did a great job with the arrangement of words and more appropriate vocabulary. Great improvement! Keep up the good work. ~Teacher Jane c\",)
In my personal opinion, people want to make others think that they are affluent enough to afford those luxurious expensive items.
>> CORRECT =)
Those visible goods can express people’s financial ability in a most direct way.
>> CORRECT =)
Knowing that how rich the person who are they dealing with, people can prevent to be behave inappropriate.
>> Knowing how rich the person they are dealing with can prevent them from behaving inappropriately.
It is mean to behave regard of the opponent’s financial power, but there are so much rude people who wouldn’t behave so it they knew the opponent is a rich.
>> It means to behave regardless of the opponent’s financial power but there are so many rude people who wouldn’t behave even if they knew the opponent is rich.
I think, due to those sort of people, there must be some people who rely on luxurious goods to protect themselves from the rude.
>> I think, due to those sorts of people, there must be some people who rely on luxurious goods to protect themselves from rude.
Even though there are other factors for it, nothing is more major factor than showing off and make oneself seem more better than it really is.
>> Even though there are other factors in it, nothing is more major than a factor showing off and making oneself seem better than he/she really is.
Of course, there can be some people who just want spend his own abundant money or who really do think those goods are high-quality so it is affordable.
>> Of course, there can be some people who just want to spend their own abundant money or who really do think those goods are high-quality so it is affordable.
But I can sure that buying luxury goods which is not appropriate for one’s income is a bad purchase.
>> But I am sure that buying luxury goods which are not appropriate for one’s income is a bad purchase.
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