What facilities would you like to be available on your neighborhood? Why?
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I think it would be good if we have a big playground around our house and since my friends all live in a building, not an apartment and there isn\'t any playground for us.
So sometimes we have to use other people\'s apartment\'s playground.
Which is really embarrassing sometimes.
Also if the mayor of bang-bae dong ( our town in Seoul ) can\'t I think for like park or anywhere that has tree, flowers and nature for privacy is good c:
But I like the way it is now too :)
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What facilities would you like to be available on your neighborhood? Why?
I think it would be good if we have a big playground around our house and since my friends all live in a building, not an apartment and there isn\'t any playground for us.
>>> I think it would be great if we have a big playground around our house. Since we are living in a building together with my friends and their family; therefore we don\'t have a playground where we can play together.
So sometimes we have to use other people\'s apartment\'s playground.
Which is really embarrassing sometimes.
>>> So sometimes we play in the playground of other apartment which is really embarrassing.
Also if the mayor of bang-bae dong ( our town in Seoul ) can\'t I think for like park or anywhere that has tree, flowers and nature for privacy is good c: But I like the way it is now too
>>> Also, if the mayor of our town Bang-Bae Dong can actually build a park with trees, flower and something close to nature then people would have their privacy. That would be great but I also like the way it is right now.
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