What factors influence a career choice?
학생이 쓴 원문
I think it is important to choose a career in our life.
I\'d like to suggest three factors when we choose a career.
First, we should be choose a career that fit a own\'s aptitude.
Second, we should be consider that is likely to continue to some extent.
Of course we can change when we want to change, but it\'s not good to change too very often.
We can\'t feel stable.
Third, we also should be consider our pay.
Because ecomomics power is directly connected to the quality of our life.
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What factors influence a career choice?
I think it is important to choose a career in our life.
CORRECT!
or>>In my opinion, it is necessary to have a career for life.
I\'d like to suggest three factors when we choose a career.
CORRECT!
I\'d like to suggest three factors when we choose a career.
CORRECT!
or>>There are three factors involved when choosing a career.
First, we should be choose a career that fit a own\'s aptitude.
>>First, we should choose a career that fits our own aptitude.
Second, we should be consider that is likely to continue to some extent.
Second, we should be consider that is likely to continue to some extent.
>>Second, we should consider that will likely continue to some extent.
Of course we can change when we want to change, but it\'s not good to change too very often.
Of course we can change when we want to change, but it\'s not good to change too very often.
>>Of course, we can change it whenever we want to, but it\'s not good to do this very often.
We can\'t feel stable.
We can\'t feel stable.
>>We cannot have stability.
Third, we also should be consider our pay.
Third, we also should be consider our pay.
>>Third, we also should consider the pay.
Because ecomomics power is directly connected to the quality of our life.
Because ecomomics power is directly connected to the quality of our life.
>>Because, having economic stability will directly influence the quality of our lives.
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