What factors influence a career choice?
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What factors influence a career choice?
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Regarding the subject above, I think there are several factors in choosing the job.
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or>>On the question above, I think there are several things to consider in choosing a job.
At first, it should be fit my specility and major field.
>>First, it should fit my field of specialization and major.
This is the most important factor because every one wants to do the work that he likes and by doing so, he will continue his job for a long time.
>>This is the most important factor because everyone will like his work and by doing so, he will continue his job for a long time.
The second one is the office atmosphere for working shoud be good.
>>The second one is, the office atmosphere at work should be good.
If office atmosphere is good, he will work with pleasure for the company and the efficiency of work will also increase.
>>If the office atmosphere is good, then he will work very pleasantly for the company and his efficiency at work will also increase.
In addition, the salary is also one of the important factors that can\'t be neglected in choosing the job. Thanks
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or>>Moreover, the amount of salary is also a major factor that shouldn’t be overlooked in choosing a job. Thanks
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