What factors influence a career choice?
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An awesome Wednesday Ms. [이름]. :)
It\'s an awe-inspiring to be an obedient daughter you are. I\'m dumbfounded when I read your composition.
You possess a huge respect to your beloved parents. A salute to you and to your parents. :) Have a great day!
Proverbs 1:8-9 \"Listen, my son, to your father\'s instruction and do not forsake your mother\'s teaching. They will be a garland to grace your head and a chain to adorn your neck. \"
Sincerely,
Teacher Lucy
When I was young, the most important thing was if I could get a feeling of achievement through my job.
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>>I thought that the most important thing is to get a feeling of achievement through my job.
I did always consider not my reality but my dream.
>>I did always consider my dream but not reality.
My dream was an archeologist.
>>My dream was to be an archaeologist.
I was eager to study archeology.
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>>I got the passion to learn archaeology.
But dream was dream.
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>>But dream was still a dream.
My parents couldn\'t accept my choice.
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>>My parents couldn\'t accept my decision.
I had to follow my parents\' policy.
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>>I had to follow my parents\' advice.
They insisted me to go to another university instead of going to Department of Archeology.
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>>They demanded me to enroll in another university rather than going to the Department of Archaeology.
I\'m now a government worker.
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>>I work for the government.
That meant my perspective of job has changed.
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>>My job perspective had changed.
I might agree with my parents policy(The most important thing that influence a carrer choice is stability.)
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but..... I wish I could have been an archeologist...
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