What factors influence a career choice?

2019-04-24 · 첨삭 강사 Lucy

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When I was young, the most important thing was if I could get a feeling of achievement through my job. I did always consider not my reality but my dream. My dream was an archeologist. I was eager to study archeology. But dream was dream. My parents couldn\'t accept my choice. I had to follow my parents\' policy. They insisted me to go to another university instead of going to Department of Archeology. I\'m now a government worker. That meant my perspective of job has changed. I might agree with my parents policy(The most important thing that influence a carrer choice is stablity.) but..... I wish I could have been an archeologist...

강사 첨삭

An awesome Wednesday Ms. [이름]. :)


It\'s an awe-inspiring to be an obedient daughter you are. I\'m dumbfounded when I read your composition.

You possess a huge respect to your beloved parents. A salute to you and to your parents. :) Have a great day!


Proverbs 1:8-9 \"Listen, my son, to your father\'s instruction and do not forsake your mother\'s teaching. They will be a garland to grace your head and a chain to adorn your neck. \"


Sincerely,

Teacher Lucy


When I was young, the most important thing was if I could get a feeling of achievement through my job.

>> CORRECT!

>>I thought that the most important thing is to get a feeling of achievement through my job.


I did always consider not my reality but my dream. 

>>I did always consider my dream but not reality.


My dream was an archeologist.

>>My dream was to be an archaeologist.


I was eager to study archeology. 

>>CORRECT!

>>I got the passion to learn archaeology.


But dream was dream.

>>CORRECT!

>>But dream was still a dream.


My parents couldn\'t accept my choice. 

>>CORRECT!

>>My parents couldn\'t accept my decision.


I had to follow my parents\' policy.

>>CORRECT!

>>I had to follow my parents\' advice.


They insisted me to go to another university instead of going to Department of Archeology.

>>CORRECT!

>>They demanded me to enroll in another university rather than going to the Department of Archaeology.


I\'m now a government worker.

>>CORRECT!

>>I work for the government.


That meant my perspective of job has changed. 

>>CORRECT!

>>My job perspective had changed.


I might agree with my parents policy(The most important thing that influence a carrer choice is stability.)

>>CORRECT!

but..... I wish I could have been an archeologist...

>>CORRECT!

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