What gadget is very destructive in your opinion? Share your answer in a few sentences.
학생이 쓴 원문
A smartphone has a very destructive power to us.Thanks to a development of technology, we can handle many things with this small rectangular type of gadget. However, smartphones affect our health negatively through bad eye vision, back&neck pain, a lack of concentration and insomnia. Furthermore, as the number of phone users increases, cyber bullying is a significant problem in nowadays. Many stars have been troubled with online haters. For these reasons, I chose a smartphone as a destructive gadget.
강사 첨삭
Hi there, Judy!
While it is true that Smartphones give us a lot of benefits, it is a double edged sword that cuts us when used wrongly. There is not much problem about this technology. It is the people who use it who we cannot control well.
Thus, congratulations on a job well done on this homework answer! Excellent job!
See you on the next class and homework.
-T. Donna~
>> Correct!
Thanks to a development of technology, we can handle many things with this small rectangular type of gadget.
>> Thanks to the development of technology, we can handle many things with this small rectangular type of gadget.
However, smartphones affect our health negatively through bad eye vision, back&neck pain, a lack of concentration and insomnia.
>> Correct
Or: However, smartphones affect our health negatively through bad eye vision, back and neck pains, a lack of concentration, and insomnia.
Furthermore, as the number of phone users increases, cyber bullying is a significant problem in nowadays.
>> Furthermore, as the number of phone users increases, cyber bullying is a significant problem nowadays.
Many stars have been troubled with online haters.
>> Correct!
For these reasons, I chose a smartphone as a destructive gadget.
>> Correct!
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