What gives people happiness.
학생이 쓴 원문
If I am a person who always are looking for opportunities that is likely to guarantee a bright future regardless of my current situation, I would accept the proposal of going to Mars or wherever that has promising potential in terms of success. Or, If I am a man who is undergoing devastating ordeals so that has a desperate reason to leave the world that I am living now, I shouldn\'t refuse the idea. However, neither of them are my case. In fact, I believe that, ironically, the constant pursuit of happiness and the expectation of a greater success in the future make people unhappy by leaving them to look their lives miserable. We need to learn how to fully appreciate the present, acknowledging all the small pleasures and joy that could be found in our daily lives. When we stop anticipating the better, then the beauty of the current situation will come into our sight. And there is no doubt that the relationship with our loved ones is the core feature that assures our lives move forward.
강사 첨삭
Wonderful thought Drexel! I didn\'t know you are quite philosophical. ^ ^
But I guess you are right. If considering that that is the case. On the other hand, since we only live once, I might as well grab the opportunity and explore the possibilities of how life is in another planet. It\'s the same as you die; but at least you can say goodbye to your family and they are actually confident that you\'re not dead because you are alive in another planet. But then again; it could be lonely out there because no matter how much you have achieved and how grand your life is, you have no family to share the joy and happiness. ^ ^
-Teacher Jedah
>>If I am a person who is always looking for opportunities that is likely to guarantee a bright future regardless of my current situation, I would accept the proposal of going to Mars or wherever that has promising potential in terms of success.
Or, If I am a man who is undergoing devastating ordeals so that has a desperate reason to leave the world that I am living now, I shouldn\'t refuse the idea.
>>CORRECT
However, neither of them are my case.
>>However, neither of them is my case.
In fact, I believe that, ironically, the constant pursuit of happiness and the expectation of a greater success in the future make people unhappy by leaving them to look their lives miserable.
>>CORRECT
We need to learn how to fully appreciate the present, acknowledging all the small pleasures and joy that could be found in our daily lives.
>>CORRECT
When we stop anticipating the better, then the beauty of the current situation will come into our sight.
>>CORRECT
And there is no doubt that the relationship with our loved ones is the core feature that assures our lives move forward.
>>CORRECT
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