What global issues are you most scared of
학생이 쓴 원문
A global issue which I am most scared of is environmental pollution.
There are many environmental issues in the world.
First, there is air pollution resulting from cars, factories and daily life
Second, water pollution is contaminated by domestic wastewater, plants and pesticides
Third, soil pollution caused by trash is also important
Last, a noise generated by traffic and construction affect to human stress
I think that the air pollution is worst of them.
The more air is polluted, the thicker layer of carbon in the atmosphere and then the earth can’t emit heat.
In the result, the temperature will rise more and more and the sea level will be increased.
Today, sea level is rising because the ice in the South pole melt
We must continually worry and consider this problem to prevent the Earth flooded
[Quiz] If the ice in the North Pole melts, will the sea level rise?
강사 첨삭
Hi Joey, I really appreciate your long and detailed response. I love how you expressed yourself so deeply about such an important global issue: environmental pollution. You explained your ideas step by step, listing the types of pollution clearly, and then shared your thoughts about air pollution being the most dangerous. What impresses me most is how you express your concern sincerely and thoughtfully. Even if some grammar corrections were needed, the strength of your writing is in your honesty and the effort you put into writing a long answer. It shows that you truly care about the environment and that you are learning to communicate complex ideas in English.
Moreover, I have prepared a response to your question, \"If the ice in the North Pole melts, will the sea level rise?\". If the ice in the North Pole melts, the sea level will not rise much. This is because most of the ice in the North Pole is already floating on the ocean. When floating ice melts, it doesn’t add extra volume to the water, just like how an ice cube melting in a glass doesn’t make the water overflow.
However, melting ice from the South Pole (Antarctica) or from glaciers on land does cause sea levels to rise, because that ice is sitting on land, not already in the ocean. When it melts, new water flows into the sea, which increases the sea level.
So, the North Pole melting has little direct effect, but it’s still dangerous because it changes the climate, affects animals like polar bears, and speeds up global warming.
I really appreciate the thought-provoking question you jotted at the bottom of the response board. It feels amusing to be able to share my insights on such issue. By the way, keep up the awesome job!
~ T. Lia
A global issue which I am most scared of is environmental pollution.
>> CORRECT or
>> The global issue I am most scared of is environmental pollution.
There are many environmental issues in the world.
>> CORRECT
First, there is air pollution resulting from cars, factories and daily life
>> CORRECT or
>> First, there is air pollution resulting from cars, factories, and daily life.
Second, water pollution is contaminated by domestic wastewater, plants and pesticides
>> CORRECT or
>> Second, water pollution is caused by domestic wastewater, factories, and pesticides.
Third, soil pollution caused by trash is also important
>> Third, soil pollution caused by trash is also a serious issue.
Last, a noise generated by traffic and construction affect to human stress
>> Lastly, noise generated by traffic and construction affects human stress.
I think that the air pollution is worst of them.
>> I think that air pollution is the worst of them.
The more air is polluted, the thicker layer of carbon in the atmosphere and then the earth can’t emit heat.
>> The more the air is polluted, the thicker the layer of carbon in the atmosphere becomes, and then the earth can’t release heat.
In the result, the temperature will rise more and more and the sea level will be increased.
>> As a result, the temperature will rise more and more, and the sea level will increase.
Today, sea level is rising because the ice in the South pole melt
>> Today, the sea level is rising because the ice in the South Pole is melting.
We must continually worry and consider this problem to prevent the Earth flooded
>> We must continually address this problem to prevent the Earth from flooding.
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