What goals have you set and achieved in the past?

2017-02-27 · 첨삭 강사 Kelly

학생이 쓴 원문

I want to talk about my near past, which I went to Taiwan by myself. I and my friend who I met when I was middle school student had made plan to go abroad, but we couldn't carry out our plan because we were student who had to study for applying to university, so we couldn't have any time and way to earn money. Therefore, after we were university student, and we had part time job during this winter vacation for travel . I haven't traveled with my friend, so I was really expecting and exciting. Even though it was rainning, we enjoyed too much. It is meaningful to me because it was first time to go foreign country by earning money by myself. I could feel that earning money is difficult and I should travel as much as I have chance. In addition, I felt I should study English harder to communicate with foreign people. I hope to go abroad as much as I can and make a lot of experiences.

강사 첨삭

Hi there, [이름]!^^

I am glad that you had a wonderful time with your friend in Taiwan. Travel as often as you can and create more memories with family and friends.^^

Enjoy your day!

~Kelly^^

I want to talk about my near past, which I went to Taiwan by myself.

>> I want to talk about my recent experience when I went to Taiwan alone.
I and my friend who I met when I was middle school student had made plan to go abroad, but we couldn\'t carry out our plan because we were student who had to study for applying to university, so we couldn\'t have any time and way to earn money.

>> My middle school friend and I planned to go abroad, but we couldn\'t carry out our plan because we are students and we had to prepare our university application, so we didn\'t have time and ways to earn money.

Therefore, after we were university student, and we had part time job during this winter vacation for travel .

>> But, after we became university students, we worked part-time during winter vacation, so we saved money for traveling.

I haven\'t traveled with my friend, so I was really expecting and exciting.

>> I haven\'t traveled with my friend, so I was really expecting it and was excited about it.

Even though it was rainning, we enjoyed too much.

>> Even though it was raining, we enjoyed too much.

It is meaningful to me because it was first time to go foreign country by earning money by myself.

>> It is meaningful to me because it was my first time to go to a foreign country using my own money.

I could feel that earning money is difficult and I should travel as much as I have chance.

>> Correct.

In addition, I felt I should study English harder to communicate with foreign people.

>> Correct.
I hope to go abroad as much as I can and make a lot of experiences.

>> I hope to go abroad as much as I can and gain a lot of experience.

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