What habits or behaviors do you want to keep as you grow older, and why?

2025-11-21 · 첨삭 강사 Gina

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As I get older, the habit I want to keep is the habit of exercising. As I get older, I will have several health problems, because I want to maintain a healthy habit so that I can live without such worries. Therefore, I want to keep my healthest habit of exercising. As I get older, the behavior what I want to keep is to listen to others well. In Korea, there is a funny story of being become a kkondae as you get older. When young people see older people, it means they have more kkondae, because I think kkondae is a person who forces their thoughrts, so I think listening to others and accepting their thoughts without forcing young people to think about them is to become a wonderful adult without being kkondae.

강사 첨삭

Hi, [이름]! 

Thank you for your answer. I enjoyed reading them. You expressed your thoughts well, and I like how you connected the idea of staying healthy and becoming a better adult. Learning about \"kkondae\" is really interesting. ^^ 

~ Teacher Gina


As I get older, the habit I want to keep is the habit of exercising.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: As I grow older, I want to continue the habit of exercising.

As I get older, I will have several health problems, because I want to maintain a healthy habit so that I can live without such worries.
>> As I get older, I want to maintain healthy habits so that I can live without health worries.
>> Or: As I grow older, I aim to live healthily so I won’t have to worry about health problems.

Therefore, I want to keep my healthest habit of exercising.
>> Therefore, I want to keep my healthiest habit: exercising.

As I get older, the behavior what I want to keep is to listen to others well.
>> As I get older, the behavior that I want to keep is listening to others well.
>> Or: As I grow older, I want to continue being a good listener.

In Korea, there is a funny story of being become a kkondae as you get older. 
>> In Korea, there is a funny saying that you become a ‘kkondae’ as you get older.

When young people see older people, it means they have more kkondae, because I think kkondae is a person who forces their thoughrts, so I think listening to others and accepting their thoughts without forcing young people to think about them is to become a wonderful adult without being kkondae.
>> When young people look at older people, they often think older people act more like ‘kkondae.’ A ‘kkondae’ is someone who forces their thoughts on others. That’s why I believe listening to people and accepting their ideas without forcing your own is the way to become a wonderful adult who is not a kkondae. 

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