What has been the best amusement park you have ever visited? Why?
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when i was young, I visited Seoul \'Everland\' amusement park in korea. and I am thinking that the Everland is best amusement park.
the reason why i think it best is that the Everland made me exiting and it is one of famous amusement park in korea.
also it has many rides and parade, theme park, etc..
but.. the true is.. that I vistied amusement park just once..Everland...
next year, if I have many time, I will visit abroad amusement park like Disney world... zZ
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Hello Mo!
Thank you for doing your homework. :)
I understand that English could be really difficult.
But it only takes faith and confidence in yourself to perfect it.
You are a smart person and I know that with constant practice you will do great… ^_^
Xoxo,
T. Christina ^^
Here are my corrections for you:
>> When I was young, I visited Everland, an amusement park in Korea.
and I am thinking that the Everland is best amusement park.
>> I think that Everland is the best amusement park .
the reason why i think it best is that the Everland made me exiting and it is one of famous amusement park in korea.
the reason why i think it best is that the Everland made me exiting and it is one of famous amusement park in korea.
>> The reason why I think it is the the best is because Everland made me excited.
and it is one of famous amusement park in korea.
>> Another reason is because it is one of the famous amusement parks in Korea.
also it has many rides and parade, theme park, etc..
also it has many rides and parade, theme park, etc..
>> It also has many rides, parades, and theme parks, etc.
but.. the true is.. that I vistied amusement park just once..Everland...
but.. the true is.. that I vistied amusement park just once..Everland...
>> But the truth is, I have only visited one amusement park and that is Everland.
next year, if I have many time, I will visit abroad amusement park like Disney world... zZ
next year, if I have many time, I will visit abroad amusement park like Disney world... zZ
>> Next year, if I have extra time, I will visit an amusement park abroad like Disney world.
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