What has been the happiest day of your life so far?

2017-12-20 · 첨삭 강사 Rose

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I wouldn’t choose the happiest day among my life. So I just make up list below. First, when I had become a couple with my first girlfriend and been to travel a lot of places together and done everything, I was really happy as much as I was getting everything in the world since it’s my first experiences everything with a girl. Second, when I got a first salary and spent to distribute half to father the others to mothers, I felt worth since I thought I spent it useful. Third, when my 19th birthday, I got an ice-cream cake and watch from my classmates. My friends gathered small amount money and bought it for me. It was surprised and impressed for me since I had never expected that. While I was writing it, I thought that first one was the happiest memories of my life since I wrote it easier than the others. And I feel happy now because this question reminded me many kind of happiness memories during writing.

강사 첨삭

I really believe that happiness is highly subjective :)

Other people have simple happiness, whereas some have astronomical demands^^

Thank you for doing your homework in spite of your busy schedule Jason.

I really hope to see you again TT

I wouldn’t choose the happiest day among my life. So I just make up list below.
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I wouldn’t choose the happiest day of my life, so I just made up the list below.
First, when I had become a couple with my first girlfriend and been to travel a lot of places together and done everything, I was really happy as much as I was getting everything in the world since it’s my first experiences everything with a girl.

>>First, when my first girlfriend and I became a couple, and we traveled to a lot of places together and did everything, I was really happy like I got everything in the world since it’s my first time to experience everything with a girl.
Second, when I got a first salary and spent to distribute half to father the others to mothers, I felt worth since I thought I spent it useful.

>>Second, when I got my first salary and spent it to share half to my father and the other to my mother, I felt worthy since I thought I spent it usefully.
Third, when my 19th birthday, I got an ice-cream cake and watch from my classmates.

>>Third, on my 19th birthday, I got an ice-cream cake and watch from my classmates.

My friends gathered small amount money and bought it for me.

>>My friends gathered a small amount money and bought it for me.

It was surprised and impressed for me since I had never expected that.
>>
It was surprising and impressive for me since I had never expected that.
While I was writing it, I thought that first one was the happiest memories of my life since I wrote it easier than the others.

>>CORRECT!

And I feel happy now because this question reminded me many kind of happiness memories during writing.

>>And I feel happy now because this question reminded me of many kinds of happiness memories while writing.



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