What have you saved these days?
학생이 쓴 원문
Recently I tried to save my prayer to God. Before my daughter goes to bed, our family has a short worship service every night. And then, before I go to bed, I have a prayer time alone because I yawn for God\'s love. When I\'m tired or I have a hard time, I try to pray. Sometimes during difficult times, I depended on You tube or people. However, over time I became more tired in spiritual. God wants me to close with God through prayer at this time. When I had lived in South Korea, I never felt alone because my family was always with me there. Also, I worked at the church with my coworker. I was the happiest person. But after marriage, my whole life changed, I often felt lonely. I realized that God wants me to come to Jesus. When I\'m alone, I confess to God \"Give me Jesus.\" I often praise God loudly in front of my daughter. I want to show her that we must praise as God\'s children. In addition, I want her to know that we are weak, but God is strong.
It is my only reason to save prayer.
강사 첨삭
Amen to that, Jane! I am awed and blessed by your essay. Glory to God! Keep sharing Jesus!-Faith-
Recently I tried to save my prayer to God. >> Recently, I tried to save my prayer to God.
Before my daughter goes to bed, our family has a short worship service every night.
>> CORRECT
OR Before my daughter goes to bed, our family has a regular night worship.
And then, before I go to bed, I have a prayer time alone because I yawn for God\'s love.
>> CORRECT
When I\'m tired or I have a hard time, I try to pray.
>> CORRECT
OR When I\'m worn out or I have a tough time, I try to pray.
Sometimes during difficult times, I depended on You tube or people.
>> Sometimes during difficult times, I depended on YouTube or people.
However, over time I became more tired in spiritual.
>> However, overtime I became more tired spiritually.
God wants me to close with God through prayer at this time.
>> God wants me to be closed with Him through prayers at this time.
When I had lived in South Korea, I never felt alone because my family was always with me there.
>> CORRECT
Also, I worked at the church with my coworker.
>> Also, I worked at the church with my coworkers.
I was the happiest person.
>> CORRECT
OR I was euphoric.
But after marriage, my whole life changed, I often felt lonely.
>> But after marriage, my whole life changed, I often feel lonely.
I realized that God wants me to come to Jesus.
>> CORRECT
When I\'m alone, I confess to God \"Give me Jesus.\"
>> CORRECT
I often praise God loudly in front of my daughter.
>> CORRECT
I want to show her that we must praise as God\'s children.
>> I want to show her that we must praise God as His children.
In addition, I want her to know that we are weak, but God is strong.
>> CORRECT
It is my only reason to save prayer.
It is my only reason to save prayer.
>> It is my only reason to save my prayer.
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