What holiday do you think should be removed from your country and why?

2022-06-23 · 첨삭 강사 Elise

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well I don\'t know about the holidays. it never concerns my work. the national holidays are not for me. on that holidays, I should work harder for incoming people. since I worked for food and beverage industry, I have never got a rest on those days. but I don\'t blame on the work. it is my choice so and I don\'t want to go to a place fully filled up by people. I don\'t like be at a crowd space. I much prefer to be in a quiet place or at home. so, for me, it doesn\'t matter if we remove all the holidays(maybe I want to). anyhow I will be in the brewery or the pub so.

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You and my husband have the same thinking since both of you are in the food and beverage industry. You guys never really get the chance to enjoy these days.

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well I don\'t know about the holidays.

>> Well, I don\'t know a lot about holidays.

it never concerns my work.

>> It never concerns my work.

the national holidays are not for me.

>> The national holidays are not for me.

on that holidays, I should work harder for incoming people.

>> On holidays, I should work harder for incoming people.

since I worked for food and beverage industry, I have never got a rest on those days.

>> Since I work for the food and beverage industry, I never rest on those days.

but I don\'t blame on the work.

>> But I don\'t blame my work.

it is my choice so and I don\'t want to go to a place fully filled up by people.

>> It is my choice so and I don\'t want to go to a place that is filled up by people.

I don\'t like be at a crowd space.

>> I don\'t like being in crowded places.

I much prefer to be in a quiet place or at home.

>> I prefer to be in a quiet place or at home.

so, for me, it doesn\'t matter if we remove all the holidays(maybe I want to).

>> So for me, it doesn\'t matter if we remove all the holidays.

anyhow I will be in the brewery or the pub so.

>> Anyhow, I will be in the brewery or the pub.

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