What holiday do you think should be removed from your country and why?
학생이 쓴 원문
In my opinion, my country doesn\'t need to remove any holiday.
Because I think it doesn\'t matter that much, and also I\'m adapted in those holidays, so I think it is the best set of holidays.
And also if we remove several holidays that we feel like we don\'t need, then it can cause a crash between opinions and opinions.
Because of these reasons, I don\'t think that we need to change some kinds of holidays in my country.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]!
Yes, this can cause a conflict. Many people will disagree since this is the only time that they have for themselves.
In my opinion, my country doesn\'t need to remove any holiday.
>> CORRECT
Because I think it doesn\'t matter that much, and also I\'m adapted in those holidays, so I think it is the best set of holidays.
>> It is because I think it doesn\'t matter that much. I have also already adapted to those holidays, so I think they are the best days.
And also if we remove several holidays that we feel like we don\'t need, then it can cause a crash between opinions and opinions.
>> Also, if we remove several holidays, it can cause a crash between people\'s opinions.
Because of these reasons, I don\'t think that we need to change some kinds of holidays in my country.
>> CORRECT
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