What I did on last Saturday

2024-01-09 · 첨삭 강사 Khai

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On last Saturday(1/6), I met my friendly coworkers-\"The Cuties\"-. First, We went to a conveyor-belt sushi restaurant. We enjoyed many kind of sushi. The sushi I enjoyed most is mackerel sushi. Actually, I don\'t like mackerel because of smell. So I don\'t like fried mackerel. However, I realized that the fresh mackerel sushi doesn\'t have any smell! So I ate two plates of mackerel sushi although it is expensive things in this restaurant! After that, we had talking time at cafe with drinking coffees. We chattered about 4~5 hours without knowing that time passed! I was pleased to having a good time with my friends.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]! I appreciate that you\'ve shared a very cool experience with your coworkers (The Cuties).  I feel like I want to try the mackerel sushi too! 
-Khai

On last Saturday(1/6), I met my friendly coworkers-\"The Cuties\"-.

>> Last Saturday(1/6), I met my friendly coworkers, \"The Cuties\". 

First, We went to a conveyor-belt sushi restaurant. We enjoyed many kind of sushi.

>>First, we went to a conveyor-belt sushi restaurant. We enjoyed many kinds of sushi.

The sushi I enjoyed most is mackerel sushi.

>> The sushi I enjoyed most was mackerel sushi.

Actually, I don\'t like mackerel because of smell. So I don\'t like fried mackerel.

>> Actually, I don\'t like mackerel because of its smell. So I don\'t like fried mackerel.

However, I realized that the fresh mackerel sushi doesn\'t have any smell!

>> CORRECT

So I ate two plates of mackerel sushi although it is expensive things in this restaurant!

>> So I ate two plates of mackerel sushi although it was one of the most expensive dishes in the restaurant!

After that, we had talking time at cafe with drinking coffees.

>> After that, we had talking time at a cafe while drinking coffee.

We chattered about 4~5 hours without knowing that time passed!

>> We chattered about 4~5 hours without knowing that time had passed!

I was pleased to having a good time with my friends.

>> I was pleased to have a good time with my friends.

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