What I do with my friends
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I love to go shopping with my friends. To discover new things is interesting for us. Especially we are interested in electronic devices, clothes and snacks. Also most of shopping malls have nice restaurants and cafes. So we can avoid the sun in summer and stay warm in winter without going outside. Those are reasons that I love to go shopping with my friends.
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I love to go shopping with my friends.
>> Correct.
To discover new things is interesting for us.
>> Correct.
Especially we are interested in electronic devices, clothes and snacks.
>> We are interested in electronic devices, clothes and snacks.
Also most of shopping malls have nice restaurants and cafes.
>> Also, most of the shopping malls have nice restaurants and cafes.
So we can avoid the sun in summer and stay warm in winter without going outside.
>> So we can avoid the heat of the sun and stay warm in winter without going outside.
Those are reasons that I love to go shopping with my friends.
>> Those are the reasons why I love to go shopping with my friends.
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