what I like most about my hometown
학생이 쓴 원문
Before start a writing, there is something to I wanna tell you. actually, Jinju is not my hometown haha. But it\'s too long to say \"where my family is live in\". So, for simple, I just introduce this city as hometown. I say the same way to talk with Korean.
Anyway, For my thinking, You wanna know about the JinJu city.
So, I\'m going to advantage of Jinju. This city has a river called \"Namgamg\". And every October, the festival is held at here and nearby area. The festival is \"남강 유등 축제\". 유등 is a lamp covered with clothes. It\'s figure like people, flower, structure and so on. Before Covid, a lot of people come to see and enjoy the festival. The festival open late at night and my home is nearby the place where the festival held , so my family go to the festival almost every year. Actually, because I have gone to this festival so so many time, it\'s not wonderful about 유등. But I really love the landscape of huge crowd.
강사 첨삭
Hi, [이름]!
Thank you for doing your homework. You did great in describing your hometown and what you like most about it! I agree that seeing a festival for the first time makes you think it\'s wonderful, but seeing it every year makes it dull.
-T. Caitlyn
Before start a writing, there is something to I wanna tell you.
>> Before writing, there is something I want to tell you.
actually, Jinju is not my hometown haha.
>> Actually, Jinju is not my hometown.
But it\'s too long to say \"where my family is live in\".
>> It is where my family lives in.
So, for simple, I just introduce this city as hometown.
>> To keep it simple, I\'ll just introduce this city as my hometown.
I say the same way to talk with Korean.
>> That is what I usually say.
Anyway, For my thinking, You wanna know about the JinJu city.
Anyway, For my thinking, You wanna know about the JinJu city.
>> Anyway, I want to tell you my thoughts about JinJu City.
So, I\'m going to advantage of Jinju.
So, I\'m going to advantage of Jinju.
>> These are what I like most about JinJu.
This city has a river called \"Namgamg\".
>> CORRECT
And every October, the festival is held at here and nearby area.
>> Every October, a festival is held here and in the nearby areas.
The festival is \"남강 유등 축제\".
>> The festival is called \"Jinju Namgang Yudeung Festival\".
유등 is a lamp covered with clothes.
>> Lantern is a lamp covered with cloth.
It\'s figure like people, flower, structure and so on.
>> It is shaped like people, flowers, structures and so on.
Before Covid, a lot of people come to see and enjoy the festival.
>> Before the pandemic, a lot of people would visit and enjoy the festival.
The festival open late at night
>> The festival starts late at night.
and my home is nearby the place where the festival held , so my family go to the festival almost every year.
>> My house is near the location where the festival is held, so my family goes to the festival almost every year.
Actually, because I have gone to this festival so so many time, it\'s not wonderful about 유등. But I really love the landscape of huge crowd.
>> Actually, since I have seen the festival many times, I don\'t find the lanterns wonderful like before but I still love the huge crowd and the landscape.
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