What I\'m grateful for this Christmas..

2021-12-31 · 첨삭 강사 Elise

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What I\'m grateful for this Christmas is that all my family members started the year healthy and were able to finish it. Although my parents are separated, I hope they are healthy and my family overcame COVID-19. And I think it was a year when I was busy at work, but I was recognized as much as I was busy and showed my abilities well. This year, many new tasks were added and many new tasks were finished well. As a team leader of a Filipino employee, I worked together and experienced new projects. And I didn\'t think I would be able to do English conversation classes for a long time, but I think I will eventually achieve my goal of three months. I want to try harder to improve my English next year. Although I spent this Christmas with my family in another city, I think this will also remain a good memory.

강사 첨삭

Hi Evan :) 

You had a great year. You have so many memories to treasure. I wish that you would have more next year!

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I\'m so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

What I\'m grateful for this Christmas is that all my family members started the year healthy and were able to finish it.
>> The thing I am most grateful for this Christmas is my family being healthy from the beginning and ending of this year. 

Although my parents are separated, I hope they are healthy and my family overcame COVID-19.
>> Although my parents are separated, I still hope that they are healthy. 

And I think it was a year when I was busy at work, but I was recognized as much as I was busy and showed my abilities well.
>> I think that this year I was very busy due to work but I was able to recognize my skills and abilities well. 

This year, many new tasks were added and many new tasks were finished well.
>> CORRECT

As a team leader of a Filipino employee, I worked together and experienced new projects.
>> As a team leader of a Filipino employee, I worked well together with him and experienced new projects.

And I didn\'t think I would be able to do English conversation classes for a long time, but I think I will eventually achieve my goal of three months. 
>> And I didn\'t think I would be able to do English conversation classes for a long time, but I think I will eventually achieve my goal in those three months. 

I want to try harder to improve my English next year.
>> CORRECT

Although I spent this Christmas with my family in another city, I think this will also remain a good memory.
>> I spent this Christmas with my family in another city and I think this will also remain a good memory.

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