What I want to invent
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In the past, it is a job of scientists to make something necessary for our life, but now, I think that is a job of engineers. In my opinion, developing a new technique is for scientists, but designing a new things with a new technique is for engineers. Because I am majoring mechanical engineering, there are lots of things I want to invent in the future. I can remember that the CEO of TESLA said he would make a hyperloop under New York city to solve a traffic jam. Actually, he made it but the result was totally different with his first design because supposed speed and time wasn\'t possible to make as a real. But I know that after lots of trial and errors, it will be a real. So I also want to contribute to invent a hyperloop technique in the future.
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1. In the past, it is a job of scientists to make something necessary for our life, but now, I think that is a job of engineers.
>>In the past, it is the job of scientists to make something necessary for our life, but now, I think that is the job of engineers.
2. In my opinion, developing a new technique is for scientists, but designing a new things with a new technique is for engineers.
>>In my opinion, developing a new technique is for scientists, but designing a new thing with a new technique is for engineers.
3. Because I am majoring mechanical engineering, there are lots of things I want to invent in the future.
>>Because I am majoring in mechanical engineering, there are lots of things I want to invent in the future.
4. I can remember that the CEO of TESLA said he would make a hyperloop under New York city to solve a traffic jam.
>>I can remember that the CEO of TESLA said he would make a hyperloop under New York city to solve the traffic jam.
5. Actually, he made it but the result was totally different with his first design because supposed speed and time wasn\'t possible to make as a real.
>>Actually, he made it but the result was totally different with his first design because the supposed speed and time wasn\'t possible in reality.
6. But I know that after lots of trial and errors, it will be a real.
>>But I know that after lots of trial and errors, it can be a reality.
7. So I also want to contribute to invent a hyperloop technique in the future.
>>CORRECT
OR>>So, I also want to contribute in inventing a hyperloop technique in the future.
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