what I will wear in my school
학생이 쓴 원문
I will wear short sleeve outwear in my school.
That is because when its winter but the school is hot.
My second reason is I like a cold.
My third reason is when we hot, we can\'t pay attention.
Finally, cold is better than the hot.
강사 첨삭
Hi, [이름]! Thanks for your effort. However, you have to organize your ideas and sentences more. Keep on practicing!
- Teacher Debbie
Homework: What do you wear when you go to school? Write about it.
>> I wear short-sleeved-outerwear in my school.
That is because when its winter but the school is hot.
>> That is because it\'s hot it my school even during winter.
My second reason is I like a cold.
>> I like cold weather.
My third reason is when we hot, we can\'t pay attention.
>> It is because, when I feel hot, I can\'t pay attention.
Finally, cold is better than the hot.
>> Cold weather is better than hot weather.
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