What impact do you want to leave in the world?

2015-10-22 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

학생이 쓴 원문

As just one of the ordinary citizens, it sounds grandiose to talk about what impact I want to leave in the world. When we were younger, we were often asked by our teachers and parents what we wanted to become or what our dreams were. The frequent answers to the question were a president, an astronaut, a fireman, a scientist, a singer, an actor or an actress. Reasons for wanting to be such professionals were diverse. Some kids say that they want to make a good wealthy country for citizens, to protect the under-privileged people, to contribute to the society by inventing groundbreaking goods, or cheer people up and so on. Indeed, we all dreamed of becoming a person who can greatly contribute to our society and is highly regarded. However, as we grow up or get older, our dreams are getting smaller. We even cannot remember what our dreams were. In reality, we are too busy with managing to survive a day. We cannot afford to contemplate on the ultimate objectives of our lives.

강사 첨삭

Hi there Sir [이름]!

How is your week going?

I hope you are having a wonderful one.

I can still remember my answer when my parents and teachers asked me that.

This was my answer before, \"I want to be a doctor to help poor people, build a big hospital and everything is for free like medicines. \" Hihihi.

But when I reached high school, I was able to realize how hard life is. If I were born a millionaire, I think I would be able to do that.
Unfortunately, I\'m not rich. =c I wasn\'t able to fulfill that dream of mine. 

Thanks for sharing your wonderful insights about this question.

See you.
Teacher Nina


As just one of the ordinary citizens, it sounds grandiose to talk about what impact I want to leave in the world.

>> correct

When we were younger, we were often asked by our teachers and parents what we wanted to become or what our dreams were.

>> correct

The frequent answers to the question were a president, an astronaut, a fireman, a scientist, a singer, an actor or an actress.

>> correct

Reasons for wanting to be such professionals were diverse.

>> correct

Some kids say that they want to make a good wealthy country for citizens, to protect the under-privileged people, to contribute to the society by inventing groundbreaking goods, or cheer people up and so on.

>> correct

Indeed, we all dreamed of becoming a person who can greatly contribute to our society and is highly regarded.

>> correct

However, as we grow up or get older, our dreams are getting smaller.

>> correct

We even cannot remember what our dreams were.

>> We can\'t even remember what our dreams were.

In reality, we are too busy with managing to survive a day.

>> correct

>> OR: In reality, we are too busy managing our lives on how to survive in a day.

We cannot afford to contemplate on the ultimate objectives of our lives.

>> correct

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