What influences you to make good choices?

2017-12-22 · 첨삭 강사 Rose

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First, experiences that I have already done make me to choose better choices. I can learn from the success. Furthermore, I might learn more from the failures since I don’t like to meet a suffering time again. Thus, after I fail, I am often to make a plan regarding of unsuccessful things to be better choices from it. Second, reading a book also gives me an indirect experience. Hence, even if I have never tried something, I can get creative idea from the stories in the book and it would help me choose better choices. So when I have free time, I use to read books such as how to solve complicate relationships, how to get a license, where is the attractive place for a travel in Korea like that. Third, communicate with others help me choose better way since they have lived different life so they have experiences that I have never undergone.

강사 첨삭

Wow! You have given me several approaches!

Thank you very much for doing your homework in spite of your busy schedule :)

See you Jason!

First, experiences that I have already done make me to choose better choices.

>>First, the experiences that I have already done make me choose better choices.

 I can learn from the success.

>> I can learn from success.

Furthermore, I might learn more from the failures since I don’t like to meet a suffering time again.

>>Furthermore, I might learn more from the failures since I don’t like to experience any suffering again.

Thus, after I fail, I am often to make a plan regarding of unsuccessful things to be better choices from it.
>>
Thus, after I fail, I often make a plan regarding unsuccessful things to gain better choices from it.
Second, reading a book also gives me an indirect experience.

>>CORRECT!

Hence, even if I have never tried something, I can get creative idea from the stories in the book and it would help me choose better choices.

>>Hence, even if I have never tried something, I can get a creative idea from the stories in the book and it would help me choose better choices.

 So when I have free time, I use to read books such as how to solve complicate relationships, how to get a license, where is the attractive place for a travel in Korea like that.

>> So when I have free time, I read books such as how to solve complicated relationships, how to get a license, where is an attractive place for a travel in Korea like that.
Third, communicate with others help me choose better way since they have lived different life so they have experiences that I have never undergone.

>>Third, communicating with others helps me choose a better way since they have lived a different life, so they have experiences that I have never undergone.

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