What invention do you think has had the greatest impact on society? How and why?

2014-08-06 · 첨삭 강사 Jessie

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I think modern communication technology has had the greatest impact on our society, even though there are many other innovative inventions to affect to our society. After all, modern communication technology has made our world connected as one. By internet, most people can expand easily their communication to all over the world. In contrast, in past time, human communication was limited spatially. At that time, people had to walk or run directly to send their messages to others. Therefore, their communication was restricted to the small range, such as family, neighborhood and their town. Also, to get the messages from long distance, people had to wait for a long time. However, in present time, people do not have to wait like that to get the messages from opposite side of earth. Just by clicking, it come to be possible that people get immediately the messages from long distance or send their messages to others in different countries.

강사 첨삭

Hello there! Thanks for expressing your idea about this. Anyway, I enjoyed reading your essay. You really are good in writing and I know that you can still get better.^^. Keep on expressing your ideas through writing and speaking English. ^^ See you later sir Greg! ~T. Jessie~ I think modern communication technology has had the greatest impact on our society, even though there are many other innovative inventions to affect to our society. >> I think modern communication technology has had the greatest impact on our society, even though there are many other innovative inventions that had affected our society.After all, modern communication technology has made our world connected as one. >> Correct! By internet, most people can expand easily their communication to all over the world. >> By internet, most people can  easily expand their communication to all over the world. In contrast, in past time, human communication was limited spatially. >> In contrast, in the past, human communication was limited. At that time, people had to walk or run directly to send their messages to others. >> Correct! Therefore, their communication was restricted to the small range, such as family, neighborhood and their town. >> Therefore, their communication was restricted to a small range, such as family, neighborhood and their town. Also, to get the messages from long distance, people had to wait for a long time. >> Correct! However, in present time, people do not have to wait like that to get the messages from opposite side of earth. >> However, in present time, people do not have to wait just like before to get the messages from the opposite side of the earth. Just by clicking, it come to be possible that people get immediately the messages from long distance or send their messages to others in different countries. >> Just by clicking, it became possible for people to receive  their messages  from long distance immediately or they can send their messages to others in different countries.

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