What is a bad hobby and how should we avoid it?
학생이 쓴 원문
I think a bad hobby is riding a motorcycle. Because it is very dangerous. Although I didn\'t ride a motorcycle, I heard to my father. He rode a motorcycle in the past. One day, he was injured while riding a motorcycle. So, he was broken his arm. Because of the situation, he told me a motorcycle is a very dangerous hobby.
강사 첨삭
Hello and good day, Jay!
I think most people perceive that riding a motorcycle is dangerous. They are not wrong. One of the major transports that causes road accidents is riding a motorcycle.
I guess you just have to stick in driving a car. By the way, I wrote a written correction on your homework, please pay attention on punctuation marks as well :)
See you in class!
T. Aki~
I think a bad hobby is riding a motorcycle. >>> CORRECT!
Because it is very dangerous.
>>> CORRECT!
Although I didn\'t ride a motorcycle, I heard to my father.
>>> Though I haven\'t ridden a motorcycle yet, but that\'s what I\'ve heard from my father.
He rode a motorcycle in the past.
>>> CORRECT!
One day, he was injured while riding a motorcycle.
>>> He got injured while riding a motorcycle one day.
So, he was broken his arm.
>>> So he broke his arm.
Because of the situation, he told me a motorcycle is a very dangerous hobby.
>>> CORRECT!\\
SENTENCE FORM :
I think riding a bicycle is a bad hobby because it is dangerous. Though I haven\'t ridden a motorcycle yet, but that\'s what I\'ve heard from my father. He rode a motorcycle in the past but got injured one day so he broke his arm. Because of the situation, he told me that riding a motorcycle is a very dangerous hobby,
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