What is a successful life?
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In my opinion, the successful life is that getting everything as much as I want. Then, How do i make it. If I control my mind, I can achieve my successful life. For example, Let\'s imagine, If I am a homeless person,Having a house can be a goal. It\'s possible, but If I crave a building, It\'s kind of impossible. After having a house, If I compare me and other people who is richer people than me, I can be a happy person. The conclusion is that make a feasible goal, do your best and don\'t compare you and other people. If someone made a feasible goal, achieved it, and be satisfied his life, it is a successful life.
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Thank you for this beautiful essay. I learned a lot from it.
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~Teacher Charry
Thank you for this beautiful essay. I learned a lot from it.
See you in class!
~Teacher Charry
>> In my opinion, a successful life is getting everything that I want.
Then, How do i make it.
>> Then, how do I do it?
If I control my mind, I can achieve my successful life.
>> If I control my mind, I can achieve a successful life.
For example, Let\'s imagine, If I am a homeless person,Having a house can be a goal.
>> For example, if I am a homeless person, having a house can be a goal.
OR >> Let\'s imagine that I am a homeless person, having a house can be a goal.
It\'s possible, but If I crave a building, It\'s kind of impossible.
>> It\'s possible, but If I aspire for a building, it\'s kind of impossible.
After having a house, If I compare me and other people who is richer people than me, I can be a happy person.
>> If I compare my situation after having a house with other people who are richer than I am, I can be an unhappy person.
The conclusion is that make a feasible goal, do your best and don\'t compare you and other people.
>> The conclusion is to make a feasible goal. Do your best and don\'t compare your self with other people.
If someone made a feasible goal, achieved it, and be satisfied his life, it is a successful life.
>> If someone made a feasible goal, achieved it, and was satisfied with his life, it is then seen as a successful life.
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