What is an extracurricular activity that has been meaningful to you?

2018-07-03 · 첨삭 강사 Shanee

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It is meaningful for me to attend soccer club. That is why the club offers me a chance to make friends. Actually, most of participants are aboout my age. So I have leaned soccer skill without concerns. And, We share their stories in a respective job. So, It could get me some job information and benefit from others. For example, one of members is working at movie theater as a manager. So he has a right to see the movies for free by the company policies. He give me movie tickets so, I can enjoy seeing movie without any payment. even it is possible to attend movie preview without reservation. by the attending soccer clubs. I can save the money and time.

강사 첨삭

Hi there JM!

You can get a lot of benefits indeed!

Anyway, thanks writing this. See you tomorrow.

~Teacher Shanee^^,


It is meaningful for me to attend soccer club.

>>> It is meaningful for me to attend a soccer club.

That is why the club offers me a chance to make friends.

>>> My club offers me a chance to make friends.

Actually, most of participants are aboout my age.

>>> Actually, most of the participants are about my age.

So I have leaned soccer skill without concerns.

>>> So I have learned soccer skills without concerns.
 And, We share their stories in a respective job.

>>> In our club, we share our stories about our respective jobs.

So, It could get me some job information and benefit from others.

>>> So, I can get some information which is very beneficial for me.
 For example, one of members is working at movie theater as a manager.

>>> For example, one of the members is working at a movie theater as a manager.
 So he has a right to see the movies for free by the company policies.

>>> Correct!

He give me movie tickets so, I can enjoy seeing movie without any payment.

>>> He gives me movie tickets so I can enjoy watching movies without paying anything.

even it is possible to attend movie preview without reservation.

>>> I can even attend movie screening without making a reservation.

by the attending soccer clubs. I can save the money and time.

>>> By attending soccer clubs, I can save money and time.

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