What is gender divide? Do you agree that providing parking spaces designated for women only promotes
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Gender divide describes the disparity between men and women in society including inequaliy of opportunity, pay and promotion at work. Confucianism has influenced gender roles more than any other factor in Korean society. Traditionally, women’s roles were limited to household matters, and young girls were taught to prepare for their future roles as wife and mother. However, women achieved constitutional rights for equal opportunities to gain access to public education and to work outside the home since 1970s. The traditional roles of women have been fading gradually. Designated parking spaces for women is one of the achievement from women\'s organization although, it has implemented by Seoul mayor. I think that most men who have a partner strongly support to movement of women\'s right but Korea has encountered low fetility rate that cause conflicts between married people and single. Singles feel like that they don\'t get any supports from the government and they are asked to pay more tax t
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Thank you for this Sir [이름].
Gender divide describes the disparity between men and women in society including inequality of opportunity, pay and promotion at work.
>>> correct
Confucianism has influenced gender roles more than any other factor in Korean society.
>>> correct
Traditionally, women’s roles were limited to household matters, and young girls were taught to prepare for their future roles as wife and mother.
>>> Traditionally, women’s roles were limited to household matters, and young girls were taught to prepare for their future roles as a wife and a mother.
>>> OR: Traditionally, women’s roles were limited to household matters, and young girls were taught to prepare for their future roles as wives and mothers.
However, women achieved constitutional rights for equal opportunities to gain access to public education and to work outside the home since 1970s.
>>> correct
The traditional roles of women have been fading gradually.
>>> correct
Designated parking spaces for women is one of the achievement from women\'s organization although, it has implemented by Seoul mayor.
>>> Designated parking spaces for women is one of the achievements by the women\'s organization although, it has been implemented by the Seoul mayor.
I think that most men who have a partner strongly support to movement of women\'s right but Korea has encountered low fetility rate that cause conflicts between married people and single.
>>> I think that most men who have a partner strongly support the movement of women\'s right but Korea has encountered low fertility rate that caused conflicts between married peoples and single people.
Singles feel like that they don\'t get any supports from the government and they are asked to pay more tax
>>> Singles feel like that they don\'t get any support from the government and they are asked to pay more taxes.
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