What is it that you need?

2020-02-21 · 첨삭 강사 Beth

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We are planing to move to a new apartment in Il-san in March, 2022. So, I think that I need to some furniture and home appliance. I\'ll change a 6 year-old refrigerator what my honey bought before we got married. Beside, I\'m planing to have a baby. If I have a baby, we\'ll have two children. So, I want to a big one than now because of my children. Lately, my son starts to like my cooking, So, I gained confidence. ^^; And, I need two beds for my baby I think we don\'t need to buy new all anything for moving a new apartment Beside, our children\'ll be just 3 or 4 years old. I think my babies\'ll search all around the home.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름]. Thank you for this. Kids would definitely need a lot of space to run around and play.

- T. Beth
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We are planing to move to a new apartment in Il-san in March, 2022.

>>> correct
So, I think that I need to some furniture and home appliance.

>>> So, I think that I need to purchase some furniture and home appliance.

I\'ll change a 6 year-old refrigerator what my honey bought before we got married.

>>> I\'ll change a 6 year-old refrigerator that my honey bought before we got married.

>>> OR: I\'ll change the 6 year-old that my honey bought before we got married.

Beside, I\'m planing to have a baby.

>>> correct

>>> OR: In addition, I am planning to have another baby.

If I have a baby, we\'ll have two children.

>>> OR: If I have another baby, we\'ll have two children.

So, I want to a big one than now because of my children.

>>> So, I want a bigger one than now because of my children.

Lately, my son starts to like my cooking, So, I gained confidence. ^^;

>>> Lately, my son started to like my cooking so I gained confidence.

And, I need two beds for my baby
>>> And, I would need two beds for my babies.

I think we don\'t need to buy new all anything for moving a new apartment

>>> I think we don\'t need to buy all new things for moving to a new apartment.

>>> OR: I don\'t think everything should be new when we move to the new apartment.

Beside, our children\'ll be just 3 or 4 years old.

>>> Beside, our children will only be around 3 or 4 years old.

I think my babies\'ll search all around the home.

>>> OR: I think our children will move all around the house.

>>> OR: I think my babies will be all over the place.

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