What is missing in your life that would make you very happy?
학생이 쓴 원문
What are the things that make us happy in our life? Are they money, a good house, many close friends, family, delicious food, good health, traveling, doing hobbies, luxury bags, high social status, or being recognized by others? We wish we could have all the things. However, no one can have everything. Even if you are the owner of a big conglomerate or a high profile person having incomparable power, there should be something that is missing in your life. You might have conflicts with your family members or your family members could suffer from serious health problems. Looking at celebrities who look perfect, happy, and owning the world on the screen, but commit suicide, we cannot judge someone’s life by looking at the surface of their life whether they are living happily.Everyone has his/her own pain. What is missing in my life? I don’t have much money or time. However, they are all excuses. Being happy or not is all up to us regardless of how much we have. Our mindset is important.
강사 첨삭
Happy mid-week!
I am so excited to hear your ideas in class.
You are right. Money and other luxurious things are not important.
We should be grateful for whatever we have. And if we want to have something, we should work hard for it. See you in class.
Teacher Nina
What are the things that make us happy in our life?
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Are they money, a good house, many close friends, family, delicious food, good health, traveling, doing hobbies, luxury bags, high social status, or being recognized by others?
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We wish we could have all the things.
>> Better: We wish we could have all of the things.
However, no one can have everything.
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Even if you are the owner of a big conglomerate or a high profile person having incomparable power, there should be something that is missing in your life.
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You might have conflicts with your family members or your family members could suffer from serious health problems.
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Looking at celebrities who look perfect, happy, and owning the world on the screen, but commit suicide, we cannot judge someone’s life by looking at the surface of their life whether they are living happily.
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Everyone has his/her own pain.
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What is missing in my life?
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I don’t have much money or time.
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However, they are all excuses.
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Being happy or not is all up to us regardless of how much we have.
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Our mindset is important.
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