What is my biggest fear?
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You do have a flair with words.
You wrote beautifully today.
Your thoughts are organized.
Keep it up!
~~ Teacher Sharon
When I was 5 years old, I went to the sea with my family.
>> Correct
It was a place of great depth, and I almost drowned while having fun at sea without knowing it.
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After that, I have fear of the water, and I have not went deep in the water park.
>> After that, I developed a fear of water, and I usually avoid deep pools and bodies of water.
I was so jealous of the swimmers, and I wanted to forget of the fear of the water.
>> I was so jealous of the swimmers, and I wanted to forget my fear of water.
But now that I have learned to swim, my fear of water is gone!
>> Correct
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