What is one healthy habit you want to start, and why?
학생이 쓴 원문
One healthy habit I want to start is to think everything in a positive way.
I read a Korean book called \'WATCHING\' recently.
It is a book about mental health.
The author felt frustrated a lot after his parents passesd away and got a depression.
Depression spoiled his physical health so he decided to overcome it.
he managed to overcome this situation by changing his mindset positively.
He took every situation he couldn\'t solve as it is and just \"wathced\' it.
It made him stop overthinking and think everything positively and he eventually could recover a physical health again.
I had the big surgery twice last year. It was so hard time to me.
But I could overcome it thinking positively.
Nothing happened to me yet so I didn\'t have to worry and overthink for my illness.
I really want to recommend this book to someone who is struggling with illness and stress.
강사 첨삭
Hi, [이름]!
Great job sharing your thoughts and connecting your personal experience to the book! I like how you explained the author’s approach and reflected on how positivity helped you. One thing to improve is grammar and sentence structure. For example, “passed away and got a depression” should be “passed away and became depressed”, and “so hard time to me” should be “a very difficult time for me.” Keep practicing writing clearly and smoothly! You’re doing really well expressing deep ideas!
~Teacher Polly
>>One healthy habit I want to start is thinking positively about everything.
I read a Korean book called \'WATCHING\' recently.
>>CORRECT
It is a book about mental health.
>>CORRECT
The author felt frustrated a lot after his parents passesd away and got a depression.
>>The author felt frustrated a lot after his parents passed away and became depressed.
Depression spoiled his physical health so he decided to overcome it.
>>His depression affected his physical health, so he decided to overcome it.
he managed to overcome this situation by changing his mindset positively.
>>He managed to improve his situation by changing his mindset and thinking positively.
He took every situation he couldn\'t solve as it is and just \"wathced\' it.
>>He took every situation he couldn\'t solve as it was and just \"watched\' it.
It made him stop overthinking and think everything positively and he eventually could recover a physical health again.
>>This helped him stop overthinking, think positively, and eventually recover his physical health.
I had the big surgery twice last year.
>>I had major surgery twice last year.
It was so hard time to me.
But I could overcome it thinking positively.
>>It was a very difficult time for me, but I could overcome it by thinking positively.
Nothing happened to me yet so I didn\'t have to worry and overthink for my illness.
>>Nothing has happened to me yet, so I don’t need to worry or overthink about my health.
I really want to recommend this book to someone who is struggling with illness and stress.
>>I really want to recommend this book to anyone who is struggling with illness or stress.
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