What is one historical place that you hope you will one day get to visit?
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I want to go to the Pyramid in Egypt.
Because, It was made very long time ago about 4,000 years ago.
I want to see a origin of civilization.
Actually, first civilization is Mesopotamian civilization.
However there isn\'t their legacy almost.
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Hi [이름]! I also hope you can visit the Pyramids of Egypt one day and learn more about the Mesopotamian civilization.
Anway, happy Friday!
~Kelly^^
I want to go to the Pyramid in Egypt.
>> Correct
Because, It was made very long time ago about 4,000 years ago.>> Because it was built a very long time ago about 4,000 years ago.
I want to see a origin of civilization.
>> I want to see the origin of civilization.
Actually, first civilization is Mesopotamian civilization.
>> Actually, the first civilization was the Mesopotamian civilization.
However there isn\'t their legacy almost.
>> However, their legacy is gone.
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