What is one mistake you\'ve done that you don\'t want to happen anymore?

2022-07-04 · 첨삭 강사 Elise

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I used to take good care of others like giving side dishes, gift, anniversary and birthday. But I can say this is on my mistake. Also, I won\'t do that anymore. It\'s because whether to do it or not, the one who leaves will leave. So I will take care of the ones who keep staying around me. I\'ve been living feeling, Don\'t strive to be a good person to the other people. Just I will do whatever I want without worrying about the people around me.

강사 첨삭

Hi Elic!  

Yes, self-love must come first. You have to know how to love yourself first before loving other people. :) 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I\'m so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

I used to take good care of others like giving side dishes, gift, anniversary and birthday. 
>> I used to take good care of others like giving side dishes and gift on special occasions like birthdays and anniversaries. 

But I can say this is on my mistake. 
>> But I can say that this is a mistake. 

Also, I won\'t do that anymore. 
>> CORRECT

It\'s because whether to do it or not, the one who leaves will leave. 
>> It\'s because whether I do it or not, people still leave me. 

So I will take care of the ones who keep staying around me. 
>> So I will take care of the ones who keep stays around me.

I\'ve been living feeling, Don\'t strive to be a good person to the other people. 
>> I\'ve been thinking that I shouldn\'t strive to be a good person for other people. 

Just I will do whatever I want without worrying about the people around me.
>> I will just do whatever I want to without worrying about the people around me.

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