What is one thing you will never change about yourself?/ Deiligent

2022-05-31 · 첨삭 강사 Roanne

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Q: What is one thing that you think you will never change about yourself? A: I always keep the time like death line or appointment time. I think it will not change. I consider it\'s very improtant to keep time. When I do my projects, I always keep the due date, even if my task requires the more time. When I submit the task, ask the acceptor I need a more time to finish perfectly. I rarely late on appointment with my friends. I always depart early in 5 min. I think to keep the time is the polite to other person. If I could not be on time, it makes me nervers. I try to plan to meet the death line. -My partents are diligent. My partents didn\'t say like \"Be diligent\". They showed What is the diligent as behaviors. I always got a perfect attendance awrad in school. My mom would not permit me the absence from school unless I was very sick. That experience make me as easily not give up something. -There is a team meeting in every bi-weekly monday.

강사 첨삭

Hi, Miss [이름]!

That\'s actually a very good attitude to have. Being diligent helps a lot to be successful in everything that we do. I hope you to continue that kind of attitude and would also teach your future kids. 

Thank you for sharing! ^_^

NOTE:  Your sentences are pretty good. Most of my corrections are your spelling, so please take note of it. Anyway, job well done with the essay! ^^

~T. Roanne ^_^
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I always keep the time like death line or appointment time. 
>> I always keep the time like a deadline or an appointment time. 
I think it will not change. 
>> Correct! 
I consider it\'s very improtant to keep time.
>> I consider it very important to keep the time.
When I do my projects, I always keep the due date, even if my task requires the more time.
>> When I do my projects, I always keep the due date, even if my task requires the most time.
When I submit the task, ask the acceptor I need a more time to finish perfectly.
>> When I submit the task, I ask the receiver that I need a more time to finish perfectly.
I rarely late on appointment with my friends. 
>> I rarely get late for an appointment with my friends. 
I always depart early in 5 min. 
>> Correct! 
I think to keep the time is the polite to other person.
>> I think to keep the time is being polite to other people. OR I think to keep the time is being polite to the other person.
If I could not be on time, it makes me nervers. I try to plan to meet the death line.
>> If I could not be on time, it makes me nervous. I try to plan to meet the deadline.

-My partents are diligent. 
>> My parents are diligent. 
My partents didn\'t say like \"Be diligent\". 
>> My parents didn\'t say like \"Be diligent\". 
They showed What is the diligent as behaviors.
>> They showed what is a diligent behavior.
I always got a perfect attendance awrad in school. 
>> I always got a perfect attendance award in school. 
My mom would not permit me the absence from school unless I was very sick. 
>> Correct! 
That experience make me as easily not give up something.
>> That experience makes me as easily not give up something.
-There is a team meeting in every bi-weekly monday.
>> There is a team meeting in every Monday biweekly.

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