What is something that you can spend money on that will make you happy? How long will it make you ha

2015-11-03 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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I rarely spend money on buying cloths. I’m not interested in jewelries, either. I’m not a big fan of luxury goods or branded products. I mostly buy things that are needed. That’s why I do not shop at department stores. I do not simple see the value for money to buy such expensive stuff. We have to figure out the real value of the products by looking into their quality rather than focusing on brand names. There are some people who feel happy about buying expensive things, carrying or wearing them. They feel satisfied when they show off to others and being proud of owing them. They want people to recognize and admire how expensive and luxury goods he/she is wearing. Although it is somewhat understandable because it is not deniable that we all are materialistic to some extent and pursuit wealth, the current phenomena is way too extreme. I’m willing to spend money for others to express my gratitude and love. For instance, when I buy my parents something or treat them, I feel happy.

강사 첨삭

You are so sweet, Sir [이름]!

I am sure that your love ones are so grateful to you. ^^

You are right, there are some people who want to be recognized just because of the expensive things they own,

Actually, there are also who gain friends because of money or gifts,

The most important thing we should do once we have a job, treat or buy something for our parents.
We cannot give back all of the things they did and spent for us.

But we should make them feel loved. ^^ Thanks for a marvelous composition.

See you.
Teacher Nina


I rarely spend money on buying cloths.

>> correct (spelling check: clothes ^^)

I’m not interested in jewelries, either.

>> correct

I’m not a big fan of luxury goods or branded products.

>> correct

I mostly buy things that are needed.

>> correct

That’s why I do not shop at department stores.

>> correct

I do not simple see the value for money to buy such expensive stuff.

>> correct

We have to figure out the real value of the products by looking into their quality rather than focusing on brand names.

>> correct

There are some people who feel happy about buying expensive things, carrying or wearing them.

>> correct

They feel satisfied when they show off to others and being proud of owing them.

>> correct

They want people to recognize and admire how expensive and luxury goods he/she is wearing.

>> correct

Although it is somewhat understandable because it is not deniable that we all are materialistic to some extent and pursuit wealth, the current phenomena is way too extreme.

>> correct

I’m willing to spend money for others to express my gratitude and love.

>> correct

For instance, when I buy my parents something or treat them, I feel happy.

>> correct

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