What is something that you can spend money on that will make you happy? How long will it make you ha
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If I have enough money, I’d like to spend it on going on a travel, buying a new house or some suits, treating my friends and relatives, supporting my parents, and so on. My parents need to get their teeth fixed and be treated well in the hospital because they are old and suffer from chronic pain on all over their bodies. I want to support my older brothers financially as well. Money can do many things to make us happy, although it doesn’t last forever. We often criticize that our society is becoming too materialistic. However, money plays a positive role in many ways. Having money and managing it well can greatly help us live better life. We have to be careful about the fact that we become the slaves of money. Our ultimate life goal is not to make money, but to live happy life. We often put the cart before the horse. We forget what to focus on. The social problem is that if you are poor, you are treated as a looser. Money is good, but let's not be destroyed by money.
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Happy hump day Sir [이름]. ^^ I totally agree with your ideas.
Money is very important in our life.It makes people happy as well.
But still good relationship with people can\'t be bought by it.
We have to spend our money wisely.
And save for the future. See you in class.
Teacher Nina
If I have enough money, I’d like to spend it on going on a travel, buying a new house or some suits, treating my friends and relatives, supporting my parents, and so on.
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>> OR: If I have enough money, I’d like to spend it on traveling, buying a new house or some suits, treating my friends and relatives, supporting my parents, and so on.
My parents need to get their teeth fixed and be treated well in the hospital because they are old and suffer from chronic pain on all over their bodies.
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I want to support my older brothers financially as well.
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Money can do many things to make us happy, although it doesn’t last forever.
>> correct
We often criticize that our society is becoming too materialistic.
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However, money plays a positive role in many ways.
>> correct
Having money and managing it well can greatly help us live better life.
>> correct
We have to be careful about the fact that we become the slaves of money.
>> correct
Our ultimate life goal is not to make money, but to live happy life.
>> Our ultimate life goal is not to make money, but to live a happy life.
We often put the cart before the horse.
>> correct
We forget what to focus on.
>> correct
The social problem is that if you are poor, you are treated as a looser.
>> correct
Money is good, but let\'s not be destroyed by money.
>> correct
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