What is something you’re grateful for today, and why?
학생이 쓴 원문
I am very grateful for my friends to visits my company. Today, my friend came to my office and offered new bu[이름]ess proposal. For me, many opportunities came from social relationships and i think that most valuable asset is friendship and social network.
강사 첨삭
Hi Jack,
I’m really happy to see you again!
Thank you for sharing your answer, it was clear, honest, and very you.
I like what you said about confidence. You explained it in a simple but powerful way:
You feel confident when you prepare well and study different cases before facing a challenge. That shows responsibility and strong discipline. Many successful people feel the same, confidence grows when you put in the work.
You also mentioned that you have many missions in your bu[이름]ess and life. I admire how you face them with preparation instead of fear. That mindset is why you keep growing and succeeding.
Great job, Jack. Your writing is getting more natural and your ideas are strong. Keep it up!
~Teacher Cathy
I am very grateful for my friends to visits my company.
>>CORRECT
OR>>I am very grateful that my friends visit my company.
Today, my friend came to my office and offered new bu[이름]ess proposal.
>>CORRECT
OR>>Today, a friend stopped by my office and introduced a new bu[이름]ess proposal.
For me, many opportunities came from social relationships and i think that most valuable asset is friendship and social network.
>>CORRECT
OR>>I believe that many opportunities come from social relationships, and that friendship and a strong network are incredibly valuable.
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