What is the best age to be and why?
학생이 쓴 원문
These days, life expectation of human beings has been increasing, so people will live longer than before. During our life, I think that the twenties is the best age since their new life will be started from that age.
People in their twenties are young, which they can have a dream freely. In addition, they are enough strong, healthy, and smart to accomplish their goal. Although they might fail to achieve their goal because of their immaturity they can overcome the failure, set a different goal, and challenge it again. In other words, they can get more opportutnities than the old since they are young.
Besides, young people can enjoy meeting and going out with many people. I think the twenties is the best time to experience and enjoy fervent love. As time goes by, many begin to consider variety of conditions when they meet someone, such as apperance, occupation, wealth, etc. But young people in the twenties can enjoy what we call pure love. Thus, the twenties is the best age to be.
강사 첨삭
Hello Miss [이름]!
You are in your twenties so I bet that you are having the best time of your life. Enjoy it.. feel it.. and embrace it. We only live young once. ^^
~Kelly^^
These days, life expectation of human beings has been increasing, so people will live longer than before.
>> These days, the life expectancy of human being has been extended, so people can now live longer than before.
During our life, I think that the twenties is the best age since their new life will be started from that age.
>> During our life, I think that to be in your twenties is the best age since a new life will start from that age.People in their twenties are young, which they can have a dream freely.
>> People in their twenties are young, so they can dream freely.
In addition, they are enough strong, healthy, and smart to accomplish their goal.
>> In addition, they are strong, healthy, and smart to accomplish their goal.
Although they might fail to achieve their goal because of their immaturity they can overcome the failure, set a different goal, and challenge it again. >> Although they might fail to achieve their goal because of their immaturity, they can overcome it, set a different goal, and be challenged again.
In other words, they can get more opportutnities than the old since they are young.>> In other words, they can get more opportutnities than the older people since they are young.
Besides, young people can enjoy meeting and going out with many people.
>> Correct.
I think the twenties is the best time to experience and enjoy fervent love.
>> I think the age of twenties is the best time to experience and enjoy fervent love.
As time goes by, many begin to consider variety of conditions when they meet someone, such as apperance, occupation, wealth, etc.
>> As time goes by, many begin to consider a lot of things when they meet someone, such as their appearance, occupation, wealth, etc.
But young people in the twenties can enjoy what we call pure love.
>> Correct.
Thus, the twenties is the best age to be.
>> Correct.
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