What is the best age to have a baby? Why?
학생이 쓴 원문
I believe that the best age to have a baby is 30years olds. Despite appropriate age for having a baby is differ from case by case, I believe 30 years old is the best age for both of physical and financial aspect.
Firstly, 30 years old is existed between too much and too young for having a baby. Obviously, these days people are starting to have a sufficient prepare time for having a baby. However, it is not good for babies and mothers to have a baby when woman is getting old. More age that people have a baby, more risk will be increased. In doing so, 30 years old is not too late age to have a baby.
Moreover, most of 30 age years old people can make a enough preparation to have a baby. This is because people have had effort on getting a job when they are 20s. As a result, most of 30s people would more afford to raise a baby than they were 20s.
강사 첨삭
Hey [이름] Jun!
In my opinion, There\'s no perfect age to have kids. Yes, scientific data is clear. The “right” age to have a child according to your biological clock is under 35 for women and under 40 for men. However, I do believe it\'s a matter of person\'s choice. ^^
- Kristine ^^
I believe that the best age to have a baby is 30years olds.
>> I believe that 30 years old is the ideal age to have a child.
Despite appropriate age for having a baby is differ from case by case,
>> Although the best age to have a child varies depending on each person.
I believe 30 years old is the best age for both of physical and financial aspect.
>> Correct.
Firstly, 30 years old is existed between too much and too young for having a baby.
Firstly, 30 years old is existed between too much and too young for having a baby.
>> Firstly, 30 years old is somewhere between being too old or too young to have a child.
Obviously, these days people are starting to have a sufficient prepare time for having a baby.
>> It\'s obvious that people need time to prepare before having a baby.
However, it is not good for babies and mothers to have a baby when woman is getting old.
>> However, having a baby as a woman ages is bad for both the baby and the mother.
More age that people have a baby, more risk will be increased.
>> The risk increases as individuals become older and have children.
In doing so, 30 years old is not too late age to have a baby.
>> In this case, 30 is not too old to have a child.
Moreover, most of 30 age years old people can make a enough preparation to have a baby.
Moreover, most of 30 age years old people can make a enough preparation to have a baby.
>> Additionally, most adults over the age of 30 can prepare themselves well for childbirth.
This is because people have had effort on getting a job when they are 20s.
>> This has happened because people have worked hard to find jobs in their 20s.
As a result, most of 30s people would more afford to raise a baby than they were 20s.
>> Therefore, most people in their 30s could afford to raise a child compared to their 20s.
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