What is the best memory you had with your friends? Explain why.
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I can come up with the memory with my friends in seoul a few months ago
My friends are 8 including me.
Most of my friends lives in jeonju where is 2 hour far from seoul
We met in the highschool and i've been touching with them so far
But these days We all are very busy, So It`s hard to connect with each other
We decided to go on a trip to seoul for our friendship
We all gathered in a hotel, and had a lot of fun
We talked about our life, memory in highschool and everything related to us
It`s very worth gathering.
We are planing to have other trip even though it would be hard to arrange our schedule
It may be awosome thing that you have wonderful memory with someones who are very special for you. And whenever I feel exhausted with tough life, Those memorys come to my mind and reflash me again.
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Awesome Tuesday Miss [이름]!
I agree with what you wrote about the memories.
I really think that when we feel so down and everything is not really going the way we want it, we can always remember the good things that happened in our past.
It\'s nice to know that you keep in touch with your friends even if all of you are already leading your own lives.
\'A friend is someone who knows all about you and still loves you.\'
by Elbert Hubbard
t. Angel
I can come up with the memory with my friends in seoul a few months ago
>>I can come up with a memory of me and my friends in Seoul only a few months ago.
My friends are 8 including me.
>>There are 8 of us in the group.
Most of my friends lives in jeonju where is 2 hour far from seoul
>>Most of my friends live in Jeonju, which is 2 hours away from Seoul.
We met in the highschool and i\'ve been touching with them so far
>>We met in high school and I\'ve been in touch with them so far.
But these days We all are very busy, So It`s hard to connect with each other
>>But these days, we are all very busy, so it\'s hard to connect with each other.
We decided to go on a trip to seoul for our friendship
>>CORRECT however the first letter in Seoul should be capitalized.
We all gathered in a hotel, and had a lot of fun
>>We all stayed in one hotel and had a lot of fun.
We talked about our life, memory in highschool and everything related to us
>>We talked about our lives, memories in high school and everything related to us.
It`s very worth gathering.
>>It was a very worthy gathering.
OR: It was a very memorable gathering.
We are planing to have other trip even though it would be hard to arrange our schedule
>>We are planing to have other trip even though it would be difficult to arrange our schedule.
It may be awosome thing that you have wonderful memory with someones who are very special for you.
>>It may be an awesome thing that you have wonderful memory with people who are very special to you.
And whenever I feel exhausted with tough life, Those memorys come to my mind and reflash me again.
>>And whenever I feel exhausted with my tough life, those memories come to my mind and reflash DO YOU MEAN TO SAY REFRESH me again.
I agree with what you wrote about the memories.
I really think that when we feel so down and everything is not really going the way we want it, we can always remember the good things that happened in our past.
It\'s nice to know that you keep in touch with your friends even if all of you are already leading your own lives.
\'A friend is someone who knows all about you and still loves you.\'
by Elbert Hubbard
t. Angel
I can come up with the memory with my friends in seoul a few months ago
>>I can come up with a memory of me and my friends in Seoul only a few months ago.
My friends are 8 including me.
>>There are 8 of us in the group.
Most of my friends lives in jeonju where is 2 hour far from seoul
>>Most of my friends live in Jeonju, which is 2 hours away from Seoul.
We met in the highschool and i\'ve been touching with them so far
>>We met in high school and I\'ve been in touch with them so far.
But these days We all are very busy, So It`s hard to connect with each other
>>But these days, we are all very busy, so it\'s hard to connect with each other.
We decided to go on a trip to seoul for our friendship
>>CORRECT however the first letter in Seoul should be capitalized.
We all gathered in a hotel, and had a lot of fun
>>We all stayed in one hotel and had a lot of fun.
We talked about our life, memory in highschool and everything related to us
>>We talked about our lives, memories in high school and everything related to us.
It`s very worth gathering.
>>It was a very worthy gathering.
OR: It was a very memorable gathering.
We are planing to have other trip even though it would be hard to arrange our schedule
>>We are planing to have other trip even though it would be difficult to arrange our schedule.
It may be awosome thing that you have wonderful memory with someones who are very special for you.
>>It may be an awesome thing that you have wonderful memory with people who are very special to you.
And whenever I feel exhausted with tough life, Those memorys come to my mind and reflash me again.
>>And whenever I feel exhausted with my tough life, those memories come to my mind and reflash DO YOU MEAN TO SAY REFRESH me again.
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