What is the best memory you have in school? Explain in detail.

2021-12-24 · 첨삭 강사 Elise

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The best memory I have in school is the memory about the school festival. Because when I entered school, due to COVID-19, I couldn\'t do anything. So, I couldn\'t enjoy the school festival and sports day. So, I was very sad. But in this year, I could be got an opportunity which I can enjoy the school festival. And at the festival, I saw different sides of my school\'s students. They sang a song, danced and rapped. Also, I could participate in many programs like putting the puzzle together and playing a quiz game. So, I felt so happy. So, I can\'t forget this day\'s memories.

강사 첨삭

Hi Kimberly :) 

I used to love school festivals as well! There are so many activities to do and you can mingle with the other students in you school which is really fun. :) 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I\'m so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

The best memory I have in school is the memory about the school festival. Because when I entered school, due to COVID-19, I couldn\'t do anything. 
>> The best memory I have in school is  school festivals because ever since the pandemic started, I couldn\'t do anything. 

So, I couldn\'t enjoy the school festival and sports day. 
>> CORRECT

So, I was very sad. But in this year, I could be got an opportunity which I can enjoy the school festival.
>> This made me very sad but this year, I can have an opportunity to enjoy school festivals. 

And at the festival, I saw different sides of my school\'s students. 
>> At the festival, I saw different sides of my school\'s students. 

They sang a song, danced and rapped. 
>> CORRECT

Also, I could participate in many programs like putting the puzzle together and playing a quiz game. 
>> Also, I could participate in many programs like puzzle making together and quiz games. 

So, I felt so happy. 
>> I felt so happy. 

So, I can\'t forget this day\'s memories.
>> CORRECT

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