What is the best part of your childhood?
학생이 쓴 원문
I think the best part of my childhood is that I don\'t have to worry about a job and money. Nowadays I\'m a bit worry about those things and quit stressful to me. I have to do my own job and earn money to do something that I want to enjoy, learn, play, ect. However when I was young, I didn\'t worry that much and I had many dreams. For example, I want to be a artist, designer, teacher, scientist and it changed a lot. Now, I have something for fun like hobbies but I don\'t know what I should do. So I miss my childhood actually.
강사 첨삭
Hi, [이름]!
Thank you for doing your homework. I actually agree with you.
I hope you\'d be able to find the thing that you really want to do!
~T. Divina^^
Here are some corrections:
1. I think the best part of my childhood is that I don\'t have to worry about a job and money.
>>CORRECT!
2. Nowadays I\'m a bit worry about those things and quit stressful to me.
>>Nowadays I\'m a bit worried about those things and it\'s stressful for me.
3. I have to do my own job and earn money to do something that I want to enjoy, learn, play, ect.
>>I have to do my own job and earn money in order to do something that I want to enjoy, learn, play, etc.
4. However when I was young, I didn\'t worry that much and I had many dreams.
>>However, when I was young, I didn\'t worry about it that much, and I had many dreams.
5. For example, I want to be a artist, designer, teacher, scientist and it changed a lot.
>>For example, I wanted to be an artist, a designer, a teacher, or a scientist but it changed a lot.
6. Now, I have something for fun like hobbies but I don\'t know what I should do.
>>CORRECT!
7. So I miss my childhood actually.
>>So, I actually miss my childhood.
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