What is the best pet to own?
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I do not like a bug but an animal. So, I often went to the zoo with mt family when I was young, and I still have a date with my boyfriend in the zoo occasionally. Besides, I have raied a pet such as a dog, a bird, and a squirrel. But we could not take care of our pet properly because my brother and I were young and we did not know how to raise it. For this reasons, in reality my parents did all trivial works for the pet. After the last pet we raied, a squirrel, died, we have not raised any pet so far. Nonetheless, after getting married, I want to breed a pet especially a dog. I love both a dog and a cat but these days, I have seen a very cute dog on TV and I have been crazy about it. The dog is a Chihuahua with long hair and its size is the smallest in the world. So, it is really cute. In addition, it is familir with people and is full of charms. The only drawback is the price: it is expensive. But someday I want to breed it.
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Hello Miss [이름]!
Thank you for sharing your love for animals especially for dogs. ^^ Anyway, please go over my corections. Have a good day!
~Kelly^^
I do not like a bug but an animal.
>> I do not like a bug but I love animals.
So, I often went to the zoo with mt family when I was young, and I still have a date with my boyfriend in the zoo occasionally.
>> So, I often went to the zoo with my family when I was young, and I occasionally go on a date with my boyfriend in the zoo.
Besides, I have raied a pet such as a dog, a bird, and a squirrel.
>> Besides, I have raised pets such as a dog, a bird, and a squirrel.
But we could not take care of our pet properly because my brother and I were young and we did not know how to raise it.
>> Correct.
For this reasons, in reality my parents did all trivial works for the pet.
>> For these reasons, my parents did all trivial works for our pet.
After the last pet we raied, a squirrel, died, we have not raised any pet so far.
>>Since the last pet that we raised died, we did not take care any pet anymore.
Nonetheless, after getting married, I want to breed a pet especially a dog.
>> Nonetheless, after I get married, I want to breed a pet especially a dog.
I love both a dog and a cat but these days, I have seen a very cute dog on TV and I have been crazy about it.
>> I love both dogs and cats. I have seen a very cute dog on TV and I have been crazy about it.
The dog is a Chihuahua with long hair and its size is the smallest in the world.
>> The dog is a Chihuahua. It has long hair and its size is the smallest in the world.
So, it is really cute.
>> Correct.
In addition, it is familir with people and is full of charms.
>> In addition, it is familiar with people and is full of charm.
The only drawback is the price: it is expensive.
>> Correct.
But someday I want to breed it.
>> Correct.
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