What is the best way for a country to bring in more tourists?
학생이 쓴 원문
If our country lets people around the world know well about tourist attractions in our country, people can enjoy our tourist attractions more easily. It is because the more we know about it, the more we can enjoy it. We need to make more Youtube contents introducing Korean cultures in English.
강사 첨삭
Hi, Steve! The overall content of
your work is comprehensible. Terrific! However, remember
to use pronouns to replace nouns in your sentences.
- Debbie
>> If we let people from around the world know well about the tourist attractions in our country, they can enjoy them more easily.
It is because the more we know about it, the more we can enjoy it.
>> It is because the more we know about something, the more we can enjoy it.
We need to make more Youtube contents introducing Korean cultures in English.
>> We need to make more YouTube contents introducing Korean culture in English.
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