What is the biggest challenge to young people today?
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Among many challenges like the opposite sex-problem and student fee etc, the most tough being maybe finding a true aptitude. The reason why i think like this is that more than sixty percent of the young responded they feel confused when they are questioned about their dream according to a report relesed from prestigious university research team. I also thought that it was serious problem when i was a student untill twenty years old. Based on my personal experiences, i just had to memorize a vast store of knowledges in textbook without deep thinking and understanding to get a highscore. Even if the courses are not related to my interest and career, i had to do to enter the prestigious university. After entering the university, i regret to be forced to do like that without definite purpose of studying. In short, what i want to state is that because our outdated education system, many young people is suffering to get a true goal in their life.
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Hi there [이름]!
You changed your time again. Haha!^^
You have a very good point to say that deciding one\'s goal in life is one of the biggest challenges of the youth today.
There is a cliche saying that the youth is the hope of the nation. Although, these days, we tend to become the burden of the nation as we try to engage to unlikely acts.
I just hope we can commit ourselves to fulfill pur responsibilities as \"hope of our nation\".
Thanks [이름]!^^
Talk to you later.
~Teacher Alice
Among many challenges like the opposite sex-problem and student fee etc, the most tough being maybe finding a true aptitude.
>> Among the many challenges like the opposite sex-problem and student fee etc, the toughest maybe is finding a true aptitude.
The reason why i think like this is that more than sixty percent of the young responded they feel confused when they are questioned about their dream according to a report relesed from prestigious university research team.
>> The reason why I think like this is that more than sixty percent of the young responded that they feel confused when they are questioned about their dream according to a report released from a prestigious university research team.
>> OR BETTER: The reason why I think like this is that a prestigious university research team released a report saying that 60% of the young feel confused when they are asked about their dreams.
>> OR BEST: The reason why I think like this is that 60% of the young feel confused when they are asked about their dreams according to a report from a prestigious university research team.
I also thought that it was serious problem when i was a student untill twenty years old.
>> I also thought that it was a serious problem when I was a student until I reached twenty years old.
Based on my personal experiences, i just had to memorize a vast store of knowledges in textbook without deep thinking and understanding to get a highscore.
>> Correct grammar, just capitalize \"I\". >> Based on my personal experiences, I just had to memorize a vast store of knowledges in textbook without deep thinking and understanding to get a highscore. *
Even if the courses are not related to my interest and career, i had to do to enter the prestigious university.
>> Correct grammar, just capitalize \"I\". >> Even if the courses are not related to my interest and career, I had to do to enter the prestigious university.
After entering the university, i regret to be forced to do like that without definite purpose of studying.
>> After entering the university, I regret to be forced to do like that without a definite purpose of studying.
In short, what i want to state is that because our outdated education system, many young people is suffering to get a true goal in their life.
>> In short, what I want to state is that because of our outdated education system, many young people are suffering to get a true goal in their lives.
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