What is the biggest challenge to young people today?

2015-02-24 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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The biggest problem for the youth these days is a high unemployment rate. The overall unemployment rate in Korea is around three percent, whereas it jumps to eight percent for the young people aged 18 to 29. It is so serious that many college graduates spend one or two years to get a job after graduation. Many students apply for a leave for six months or a year before graduation and prepare to get a job such as learning a language abroad, obtaining a special license or a certificate, or working as intern because employers doubt their qualifications and capability once they graduate from college and spend too much time seeking a job. The longer time you take to search for a job after graduating from college, the less chances you will have to get hired. Because of the high youth unemployment, there are a lot of social problems. It is approaching an aging society and young people should actively participate in economic activities, so young people can support the senior citizens.

강사 첨삭

Good afternoon!

How was your day, Sir [이름]?

Was it better than yesterday? I hope so. ^^

High unemployment rate really leads to social problems.

There are people who wants to have a high position immediately once they work.

Some depends on the salary, work environment and so on.

We do have different reasons when we look for a job.

However, we should also think about the time wasted because of it.

Do you agree with me? Share your feedback in class.

Teacher Nina


The biggest problem for the youth these days is a high unemployment rate.

>> The biggest problem of the youth these days is high unemployment rate.

The overall unemployment rate in Korea is around three percent, whereas it jumps to eight percent for the young people aged 18 to 29.

>> correct

It is so serious that many college graduates spend one or two years to get a job after graduation.

>> correct

>> It is serious that many college students get hired after one or two years after graduation.

Many students apply for a leave for six months or a year before graduation and prepare to get a job such as learning a language abroad, obtaining a special license or a certificate, or working as intern because employers doubt their qualifications and capability once they graduate from college and spend too much time seeking a job.

>> correct

>> Many students apply for a leave for six months or a year before graduation and prepare to get a job such as learning a language abroad, obtaining a special license or a certificate, or working as intern. It is because employers doubt their qualifications and capability once they graduate from college and spend too much time seeking a job.

The longer time you take to search for a job after graduating from college, the less chances you will have to get hired.

>> correct

>> The more time you spend looking for a job, the less chances you will get hired.

Because of the high youth unemployment, there are a lot of social problems.

>> correct

It is approaching an aging society and young people should actively participate in economic activities, so young people can support the senior citizens.

>> correct

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