What is the biggest economic problem in your country?

2019-01-25 · 첨삭 강사 Eunice

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One of the economic problem is Youth Unemployment. College students want to get a job at the same time they graduate. But Korea company has not seats. Exatly, Many students don\'t want to enter the small and medium- sized businesses. All of the student want to be a clerk of conglomerate. So, The competition rate of conglomerate is very high. Also, The company doesn\'t want to eomploy because of korea wage is high.

강사 첨삭

Thanks for dropping by the board, Jennifer!

Just be mindful of the proper use of conjunctions, but all in all you were great.

~Teacher Eunice


One of the economic problem is Youth Unemployment.

>>> One of the economic problems in my country is the unemployment rate.  

College students want to get a job at the same time they graduate. But Korea company has not seats.

>>> College students want to get a job after graduating, but the companies in Korea don\'t have enough vacancies.

Exatly, Many students don\'t want to enter the small and medium- sized businesses.

>>> Actually, many students don\'t want to enter small and medium-sized businesses/companies.

All of the student want to be a clerk of conglomerate. So, The competition rate of conglomerate is very high.

>>> All of the students want to be a clerk for conglomerate companies, but the competition is very tough. 

Also, The company doesn\'t want to eomploy because of korea wage is high.

>>> In addition to that, the companies don\'t want to employ because the wage rate is high.

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