What is the biggest economic problem in your country?
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One of the economic problem is Youth Unemployment.
>>> One of the economic problems in my country is the unemployment rate.
College students want to get a job at the same time they graduate. But Korea company has not seats.
>>> College students want to get a job after graduating, but the companies in Korea don\'t have enough vacancies.
Exatly, Many students don\'t want to enter the small and medium- sized businesses.
>>> Actually, many students don\'t want to enter small and medium-sized businesses/companies.
All of the student want to be a clerk of conglomerate. So, The competition rate of conglomerate is very high.
>>> All of the students want to be a clerk for conglomerate companies, but the competition is very tough.
Also, The company doesn\'t want to eomploy because of korea wage is high.
>>> In addition to that, the companies don\'t want to employ because the wage rate is high.
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